Neat Storyline
I love the storyline, the costume & when u using the First-Person view. But the graphic/art need more works.
I'm not judging your artistic value, just try to make it better character design. Oh, AND THE BACKGROUND TOO!
Do this, you'll receive a 4 vote.
But for now, I give u 3/5 & 6/10.
Cheers!
P.S: There's some typo too. (E.G: Planat, CORRECTION: Planet)